Sunday, November 28, 2010

The Dead Sky

failing as she
tries to meld instinct with intent,
the dead sky melts away.


haiku heights

one single impression

For more of my poetry, check out:
indigo
saying I love you at the beach

13 comments:

  1. This is a beautiful haiku, a testament of the human spirit. I enjoyed each line.

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  2. Powerful imagery. A very fine piece!

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  3. hmmm, your 'ku makes me stop to contemplate...

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  4. Hi. I enjoyed your haiku, particularly the fact that to read it twice to really get it. This is the second haiku i've read today with the word meld... one would think that was the word for the week... lol

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  5. Thoughts rendered on our spirit. Well done.

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  6. you "melded" the OSI and HH together nicely.

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  7. smart word play..
    love your entry.
    Smiles!

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  8. Hi... haikus..I love it .. beautiful imagery there.. I can clearly see what I want too..

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  9. Wonderful Haiku. Great use of the prompts, I have yet to write it.


    Melanie

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  10. Great take on the prompts! True thoughts -- both instinct and intent make us human.

    Regards.

    Carlos

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  11. Great spontaneity in the Haiku and a powerful picture!!

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  12. really powerful haiku..
    beautiful words... :)

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  13. Love that last line! It makes the poem so powerful!

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